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Post by Gypsy on Sept 8, 2007 19:59:35 GMT -5
absolutely amazing. Your comparisons and similes are so greatly chosen. I hung to every word till the last. And the suspense was nicely placed, making you then wonder what had happened to you and the other girl.
I also like your talent for making you feel exactly as the character does, like when she was coming out of the dream in confusion.
i cant wait till the next part. POST IT SOON!
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Post by Gypsy on Sept 8, 2007 20:12:17 GMT -5
oh...freaking...wow...
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Post by Gypsy on Sept 25, 2007 21:21:24 GMT -5
first real fight. you can feel the way the tables have turned. you can tell how now Ashley is gaining some of herself by witnessing Spenser. like looking into a mirror without realizing it. you have deffinitly sparked a new sort of suspense. one that is so obvious yet you need to know the details. your endings have also had a great impact to keep the readers attention. And you can almost feel the knives being stabbed into the hearts with each new thing that they both experience together.
I just wonder now how Ashley is going to take the information that the one person that was bringing her heart back has a dead one also. I bet thats going to include more drinking and restless to no sleep.
please update asap.
Gypsy
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